Looks really really cool, hope to see an updated version soon to even further solidify my appreciation for all the Yareli love you've been putting out. Hope your stuff makes it this year at least.
Love the metallic bits, gives more depth to Yareli in my opinion since her default version doesn't have a lot of that going on.

thank you for suggestions, i am planning on improving the textures, like adding more depth to certains parts and adding more dirt and rust to the model

Also for the sake of showing it off, you should take the pictures at a much higher resolution and try take pics that show off specific part of the model closely rather than just the whole thing. It's very difficult to judge the quality of the custom helmet because it's just so small in the pics.

I think this is a good start, but it isn't quite there yet. Everything is very flat, there is very little texture to the surfaces and nothing really stands out on the design.

Adding some more trim in the accent colour to the surfaces like on the edges where the pink and black surfaces meet would break it up a touch. Also a lot of magical girl outfits have bells and frills, I think leaning into that would help. The little nodule bits at the end of the skirt might make for good bells if textured that way.